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"The Aang Jenny Power Hour" Update Thread
« Thread Started on Aug 7, 2007, 11:03am »

I'll post the most recent information about my new Avatar/Teenage Robot crossover fanfiction here.

P.S. If you haven't seen my characters profiles, you can check them out here:

Jessie Winkler (Teenage Robot):
http://tremorton.proboards33.com/index.c....read=1156546476

Jane Winkler (Teenage Robot):
http://tremorton.proboards33.com/index.c....read=1156546577

Kara (Avatar):
http://tremorton.proboards33.com/index.c....read=1156546994

Taka (Avatar):
http://tremorton.proboards33.com/index.c....read=1156547100

Chapter Names (NOTE: The names below each Chapter are the parts that make up the Chapter. Avatar means that it takes place in the Avatar World, and Tremorton means that it takes place in the Teenage Robot World.)

Chapter 1: Whirlwind Attack! -
Whirlwind Attack! (Avatar)
"Where am I?" (Tremorton)
Main Title

Chapter 2: Aang Meets New Faces (Tremorton)

Chapter 3: Friend from the Future - (Avatar)
Lost with an Earthbender (draft finished - ready for edit and proofread)
Friend from the Future

Chapter 4: Better than Expected - (Tremorton)
Disguises (FINISHED)
Better than Expected
Bikers Barge In

Chapter 5: Angels Attack - (Avatar)
Angels Attack
Healing
The Aftermath (FINISHED)

Chapter 6: Last Goodbyes - (Tremorton)
Not the Best Idea
Last Goodbyes

Chapter 7: Epilouge -
The Final Battle (Avatar)
Epilouge (Avatar and Tremorton)
End Credits

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Re: "The Aang Jenny Power Hour" Update Thread
« Reply #1 on Aug 7, 2007, 11:04am »

Sorry for the double post beforehand...

Yes! I live, I LIVE!!!

I'm planning on not writing this fanfic from beginning to end. When I come up with ideas for a chapter, I'm writing them up and posting them here.

You guys can help me edit and proofread if you want. Tell me what parts are awesome and what parts could use more work. Too much dialouge or too little? Were the characters IN character? You tell me and I can work on it!

So, without further ado, here's Section 3 of Chapter 5: The Aftermath!

Pros: I think I did a good job with keeping people hooked.
Cons: I think there was too much dialouge.

What do YOU think?

Chapter 5: Section 3
The Aftermath

SPLASH!

“Ughn…”

Jenny could have sworn she felt something cold hit her face.

“What the?”

She opened her eyes. The sky was the color of midnight, with sparkling stars and a bright full moon high in the sky. Her friends stood before her, but they weren’t Brad, Tuck, and Sheldon…

“I think it’s working,” Sokka said. “Do it again!”

A stream of water was coming towards her…

SPLASH! Again.

The robot shook the water out of her head, at least as much as she could. She glared at the fourteen year old “waterbender” who threw it at her. Katara just answered with a concerned look.

“Are you okay?” Katara asked her in a soft voice.

“I was before that. Do you mind? You could’ve fried my circuits!”

Kara ran to Jenny and gave her a hug. “Hooray, you’re alive!”

“Uh, sure,” she said, returning the friendly hug, and continued. “Hey guys, what happened to those three fire girls?”

“They left, Jenny,” Kara answered her.

“But, why would they just leave?” asked Jenny.

“Ugh, even I know the story about the waterbenders.” Taka muttered under her breath.

Jenny was wondering what they were talking about. Ever since she entered this world, she was so confused. What was this story that Taka was talking about? A legend, or a dream? Jenny mustered the courage to ask.

“Story? What story?”

A majority of the group looked at Katara, knowing she would have to tell the story. After all, she was a waterbender, a master, even, and had more experience than Kara.

“Okay, here it goes,” she began. “Jenny, where do you think waterbenders get their strength from?”

“How am I supposed to know?!?”

“I’m just asking you. Take a guess.”

“Um… the waters of the world?” Jenny suggested.

“Close, but not quite. We do get our life from the ocean,” explained Katara.

“That makes no sense at all.” Jenny growled.

“Well, if you want to believe something else, go ahead!” Katara yelled at her. She took a deep breath, trying to stay calm, (even though this girl was not cooperating) and continued.

“Our life is from the spirit of the ocean, and our strength…”

Jenny had a puzzled look on her face, so Kara decided to help her out. She left her bag behind the tree that Jenny was laying under. Grabbing it, the twelve year old waterbender sat next to Jenny and pointed to the moon on the Water Tribe symbol.

“… The moon?”

“Yep! We get our strength from the moon, and our life from the ocean,” answered Kara.

“That’s why they left, Jenny. Since there it a full moon out tonight, we would have overpowered them,” Katara added.

“So it would have been useless for them to attack at night!” Kara concluded.

“Oh… I get it now!” Jenny exclaimed.

Kara smiled, but the saw her brother looking away in sadness.

“What’s wrong, Sokka?” she asked.

“It’s nothing…”

“Are you thinking about Yue?”

Silence.

“Yeah.”

“Wait, who’s Yue?” Jenny asked.

“We don’t have a clue what you’re talking about,” Taka added.

“Could you please tell us who she is, before we go nuts?” Toph finished.

“I’m not quite sure, but I think she was Sokka’s girlfriend,” Kara started. “She was a princess from the Northern Tribe. But she gave up her life. It’s a long story, really…”

“Oh…” Jenny said. “I would like to hear more, but I can tell you guys don’t really want to talk about it.”

It’s true. The three Water Tribe siblings looked really bummed. Even Momo quietly chittered. Jenny could see their sadness enhanced by the moonlight.

Katara looked up at her and gave a weak grin. “Thanks.”
“No problem. Well, I guess be better go to bed or something. We probably have a big day tomorrow.”

“Yeah, I guess you’re right,” Kara agreed.

Everyone went to sleep in a couple of minutes. Except for Kara, who couldn’t sleep. She was very worried, and had a lot of questions stuck inside her head. Will Aang ever come back? How is the world supposed to survive without him? And will the group have enough skill to fight Azula, Mai, and Ty Lee? She gulped. This is not going to be easy, the young waterbender thought. I need some training. Kara crawled over to her sister and tapped her on the shoulder.

“Ugh, what is it, Kara?”

“Um, hi. Listen, I don’t think I know the advance forms very well. And I’m not like you. I can’t master waterbending forms as fast as you,”

“What do you mean?” asked Katara, even though her mind was still asleep.

“I need help, and you’re the only one who can help me. I don’t feel like I can perform a double water whip smoothly. Or the octopus form…”

“I don’t know, Kara. It just doesn’t feel right to practice without Aang here…” Katara whispered, glancing at the Avatar’s pets.
Kara could see the tears starting to form in her older sister’s eyes, which she quickly wiped away. Kara hardly ever saw Katara cry, so to her it meant something – Katara missed the airbender dearly, with all her heart.

The younger waterbender placed her arm on the older one's shoulder. “Katara, who was the one person, out of the whole tribe, that said the Avatar would return one day?”

“Me…” Katara quietly said, drying the rest of her tears.

“Well, I believe now, and I’m sure Sokka does too. So, why don’t you?”

Katara pondered that for a moment. “You’re right,” she agreed.

There was silence for a moment.

“So, do you want to master that double water whip, or not?”

“What about the octopus form?”

Katara chuckled a bit. “That too.”

Appa growled as the two raced into the lake nearby. Like Jenny said, they were going to have a big day, and they needed to be ready.

EDIT: Made the ending longer.
EDIT 2: Added Appa and Momo.
EDIT 3: FINISHED!!! I think...

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Re: "The Aang Jenny Power Hour" Update Thread
« Reply #2 on Aug 7, 2007, 11:06am »

Ack, a TRIPLE post! Sorry!

Okay, here's the next draft, "Disguises"! It takes place in Tremorton. I suggest you read the character profiles I first posted before reading this chapter. As you can see in this chapter, there will be some AangxOC in this fanfiction.

Pros: I think put a pretty funny scene in there.
Cons: It seems a bit choppy to me.

What do YOU think?

Chapter 4: Section 1
Disguises

“So, how’d you get here anyway?” Brad asked.

“I’m not sure…”

The group was still trying to figure out how this kid got into Tremorton in the first place.

“Maybe it was one of Mrs. Wakeman’s inventions,” Tuck suggested.

“Well, I was in a battle with a firebender. I created a whirlwind, but then I got sucked in it. I remember finding myself in a lab afterwards,” Aang responded. “And the first thing I saw was a pair of goggles or something.”

“The Future Scope?” asked Jessie.

“I don’t know!”

“That’s probably it, Jess,” Jane said. “Aang, I think that was a portal that transported you, not the whirlwind. The portal was probably in the Future Scope. It transported you here and Jenny to your world!”

“We need to get that Future Scope!” exclaimed Jessie.

“But how is Aang going to get it?” asked Brad. “He stands out a mile away.”

“Yeah, it’s not like he can just pop in there and take it with her looking,” Tuck added.

“Hmm…”

“What’re you thinking, Sheldon?” Jessie asked.

“Maybe you can, Aang! Follow me.”

“Uh, okay…”

They both came back a half hour later.

“What do you guys think?” asked Sheldon.

Aang wasn’t next to him. Instead there was a teenager in a plumber’s outfit. No, wait. That was Aang.

“Heh, that’s a nice disguise, kid!” Brad exclaimed.

“Yeah, I gotta admit, I didn’t recognize you at first” Jane added.

“You look… really HUNKY!”

“He looks hunky?!?”

The rest of the group glanced at Jessie.

“What? He does! Although, I doubt you’ll be able to get in and out by yourself, Aang,” she said to the “plumber”.

“What do you mean?” he asked.

“Look, I know the Wakeman lab like the back of my hand. I can help you find that Future Scope in an instant!”

“Yeah, but just one problem,” Brad reminded her. “Dr. Wakeman will spot you before she’d ever spot Aang. You need a disguise, too!”

“You know, I think I might have an extra plumber disguise back at my workshop,” Sheldon exclaimed. “Come on.”

The two left for the junior scientist’s workshop.

“Why does he even have plumber costumes?” asked Jane.
Jessie ran up to them after awhile.

“Okay, I’m back!” she said in her plumber’s outfit. Her auburn hair was hidden inside of a cap that she was wearing.

“We’ll be hiding behind this bush,” Brad whispered. He ran off with the rest of the group, leaving Aang and Jessie at the door.

“Well, it’s either now or never. Here goes nothing… really more like here goes EVERYTHING…”

Ding DONG!

“Hello?”

Jessie began to speak. “Uh, yeah, we’re from the plumber company down the street, and we noticed that there was a leak in your ceiling.”

“What are you talking about? There’s no leak here!” Mrs. Wakeman exclaimed.

“Well, you haven’t been looking hard enough,” Jessie replied in a low, boyish voice. “Come on, uh, Spencer, let’s inspect.”

“Spencer?”

Jessie grabbed his arm before he could say anything else and sprinted to the lab-

“Excuse me! Why are you going into my lab? I thought you said the ‘leak’ was in the ceiling!”

“Sorry, ma’am, that was my mistake. The leak is actually in the… the wall downstairs!”

“Why would there be a leak in the wall, sir?”

Yes! She’s falling for it! Or at least acting like it, Jessie thought. “There just is, okay lady?” she said, trying to stay in character. “Now me and my partner here are going to fix this leak, and there’s nothing you can do about it!” She ran to the lab and shut the door, but knowing Jenny’s mom, she knew the alarms were going to sound soon. For some reason, though, they didn’t.

Jessie sighed with relief. “Okay, we’re in,” she told Aang in her normal voice. “Now try to find those goggles!”

Aang tried to, but he just couldn’t. He was still packed with burden.

Jessie turned to him. “Aang, you okay?”

“Yeah, I’m fine.”

“Are you sure? You can talk to me about it.”

“Really, I’m fine.”

The girl just stood there, silently. “I miss Jenny…”

“Who’s Jenny, anyway?”

“She’s my friend. She’s a robot, but to me, actually most of us, she doesn’t seem like it. She’s just a normal teenager, like the rest of us.”

Aang took a deep breath.

“My friends treat me like that too. I feel like they’re not my friends because I’m the Avatar or anything. They’re my friends because I’m, well, Aang.”

“You miss them, don’t you?”

“Yeah,” he said, slumping to the ground.

“Hey, don’t worry! We’ll make sure you get back to your own universe.” Jessie spoke. She ran to him and put her arm on his shoulder. It reminded him of someone…

The boy smiled. “Thanks, that means a lot.”

“No problem, Aang.”

“It’s funny. You remind me of one of my friends. Except, I feel like she’s more than a friend…”

“Oh, really?” Jessie asked nervously. “What’s she like?”

“Well, she’s really nice, and really, really pretty. And I feel like I can count on her for anything. She’s the sweetest girl that I’ve ever, ever met.”

“She must treat you well.”

Aang thought of the girl that he loved again. “Yeah, she does,” he whispered.

“Ahem!”

The two of them turned around, and saw Mrs. Wakeman glaring at them. They both exchanged the same thought.

Aw, crud.

EDIT: Added a transition.
EDIT 2: Added lines and description here and there. Also changed some things.
EDIT 3: FINISHED!!!

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Re: "The Aang Jenny Power Hour" Update Thread
« Reply #3 on Aug 7, 2007, 11:07am »

A QUADRUPLE POST?!? Yep. I'm bad, very bad...

BOO-YA! Take THAT, writer's block!
Sorry, just had to let that out...

Here's the next chapter section, "Lost with an Earthbender"! It's mainly to introduce Taka, my OC. Please remember that I'm NOT posting the chapters in order, look at my first post for more information.

Pros: I pretty sure I got the lines down so both of the character stay IN character.
Cons: I think it's a bit too short. Most of my chapter sections are three pages long...

What do YOU think?

Chapter 3: Section 1
Lost with an Earthbender

A minute ago, Jenny was safe in her somewhat comfy home. Now, she was alone in the wilderness. Trees surrounded her in every direction, along with some randomly placed shrubs. The robot girl groaned, she was lost, and her town was in the dust. No civilization anywhere.

Huh? What was that?

She heard a rumble in the ground with her advanced hearing. Then she heard it again.

Jenny decided to check out the situation and ran towards the noise. When she got close enough, she saw a girl around her age, with chestnut hair and tan skin. She was wearing a green tank top and beige colored pants. The girl was next to a group of boulders, and was staring at one in particular, as if she was going to pick it up.

What does that girl think she’s doing? She could break bones doing that!

Sure enough, the girl picked up the boulder. Well, sort of. She raised her arms and slammed them onto the earth below her. As if on cue, the boulder flew into the sky and crashed on the ground, splitting into hundreds of pieces.

Whoa… the robot thought in awe. How did she do that? “Eh, must be some sort of illusion.”

The girl turned towards Jenny. “Who’s there?” she shouted, ready to fight if needed.

Oops… did I just say that out loud? Well, this girl might be able to tell me where I am.

Jenny stepped over the bushes she was behind and gave a little wave.

“A machine?” the girl eyed curiously. “You sure you’re not Fire Nation?” It was even weirder when the machine started to talk.

“Hi, I’m Jenny,” the robot spoke, offering her hand for a shake.

Even though she was suspicious, the girl accepted the handshake. “I’m Taka. It’s nice to meet you.”

“It’s nice to meet you too. Do you know where we are?”

“Actually, I don’t. I should, though. I’ve probably strayed too far from home.”

Jenny’s head sagged. She thought this girl would have been her way out of this place. Who knows how she would get home now. Unless Taka could maybe do something with the rocks. Maybe they could reach civilization!

“Hey, what were you doing with those rocks?”

“What do you mean?” asked Taka.

“You were moving those boulders with your mind or something,” Jenny said, pointing over to what was now a pile of pebbles.

“Oh, that was just some earthbending.”

“What’s ‘earthbending’?”

Taka just stared at her like she was crazy. “You’re messed up. Everyone knows what earthbending is, even if they’re not from the Earth Kingdom.”

“Well, the only Earth I know about is the one I’m supposed to protect.”

“Okay…” Taka rolled her eyes. “I don’t know where you came from, but here, earth is an element. Got it?”

“I’ve studied the Periodic Table thousands of times, and Earth is not on there.”

“There’s no periodic table here. The elements are water, earth, fire, and air.”

I must be in ancient times or something, Jenny thought. Because I know however many years ago, people thought that those were the elements.

“I guess we’re in the Earth Kingdom,” Jenny mumbled, trying to put the pieces together. “Rocks are a part of Earth, right?”

“Yeah, I suppose so,” Taka confirmed. Her eyes suddenly widened. “Oh, there’s sure to be a village around here! The Earth Kingdom is full of villages, you know.”

“And with you ‘earthbending’ or whatever it is, you can push the rocks out of the way so we’ll be there in no time!” added Jenny. I’d do it myself, but who knows what my powers could do to the timeline.

“Sure, let’s go.” Taka ‘bent’ the rest of the boulders out of the way and they walked along the path.

The two girls were mostly silent, only having a few conversations. Then Taka finally decided to speak.

“So, you got any friends?”

“Of course I do!” Jenny exclaimed. “I have five: Brad, Tuck, Sheldon, Jessie, and Jane.”

“I had a friend that disappeared for a long time,” Taka mentioned.

“How long did you have to wait? Did something happen to him?” Jenny asked.

Taka stopped suddenly, as if a waterbender had frozen her feet to the ground.

“I don’t really want to talk about it,” the earthbender whispered, thinking about her horrible past in a horrible place.

“What do you mean? And why’d you call me ‘Fire Nation’ earlier?”

“I said I don’t want to talk about it!” Taka yelled. The two continued walking. However, when Taka saw how curious the robot looked, she told her story, even though she could be blurting it out to a firebender.

“Here, sit.” The earthbender pointed to a huge rock, which the robot sat on. Taka sat on the ground.

“When I was nine, a pack of Fire Nation troops attacked our village. They took away all of the earthbenders, including me, and stuck us on a prison ship. None of us could earthbend out of the place, since it was all made of metal.”

“Oh, that’s so sad.” Taka stuck her hand in Jenny’s face, forcing her to stop, and continued.

“My friend’s father also got captured. He took care of us while we were imprisoned.”

“How did you end up getting out?” asked Jenny.

“Hold that thought.” Taka just noticed that they were in front of another group of boulders.

“Listen,” she whispered.

Without needing to use her supersonic hearing, Jenny could hear people on the other side of the rock wall. One of them, a girl, sounded anxious.

“One of the girls sounds really worried,” Jenny said. “We should help her!”

“Sure, whatever,” Taka replied as she moved the rocks out of the way. And she was shocked at what she saw.

EDIT: Added a couple sentences.
EDIT 2: Litte changes, here and there...

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